Moneybags Jr.
Mr. Moneybags was somehow able to find a woman in his dreadful life that thought he was worth bearing a child for. She was dreadfully mistaken about Mr. Moneybags being worth anything but a fat bank account. They did however reproduce and they created a most interesting and puzzling individual. His name was Moneybags Jr. He hated his last name and hated pretty much anything that had to do with his father. You see Junior here resents his father for giving him the world but never spending any time with him as a child. So naturally when the time came for Junior to graduate high school and move to college he chose a destination as far away from his home in Boston as possible. This lead him to the University of Washington in Seattle. It is no coincidence that his destination is also the home of Microsoft, the company in which his dad has lost all faith. This hatred for Microsoft of Moneybags Sr. sparked an interest in the company from Junior. It was the Junior's first day in Seattle. After getting off of his plane alone he flagged down a cab to take him to his dormitory as all first year students are required to live on campus. Junior asked the cab driver to take him through the interesting parts of Seattle's down town seeing as he had never been to the city. They were driving through the fisherman's wharf there was a woman chasing her young child across the street when the cab driver had to slam on his breaks. At this moment, tires screeching to a halt, Junior's head whipped around to the left and just before his eyes closed they met another set of eyes, the most beautiful eyes he'd ever seen, and for that one moment, for the first time in his entire life he felt at home.
Puget Sound Seattle, WA
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ReplyDeleteHi Jordan – For our third blog assignment, I am to critique not only your first two posts, but how they relate with the theme of your blog and the pictures/images that you chose to display your personal prompt and idea. After looking over your blog multiple times and reading the posts that you submitted, I understand the overall idea that you are trying to convey about the relationship between money and technology. The clean-cut theme and simple pictures makes it easier to see and read the text. However, Iʻd be lying to you if I said that I really understood the execution of your first post. There really isnʻt much of a connection between the story that you composed and the images on your blog. It seemed like a desperate attempt to find something (anything) that could possibly be related to “Mr. Moneybags” and technology. What were you trying to convey with your picture? Perhaps the lack of interaction with the people surrounding you because youʻre all focused on the present technologies? Is that supposed to be the influence of your father (Mr. Moneybags)? As confused as I seem to be, I really do appreciate the amount of thought that Iʻve had to put into this – You leave a lot of room for imagination and creativity, which is awesome because it gives you the freedom to add more as we go along. I think you could have chosen a better theme. Rich people usually have decadent surroundings, although I guess the simplicity of the blog could be a modern take on wealth. I really enjoyed your second post. There were a few plot holes but I think that was purposely done to add more later on. I had fun incorporating your idea of Moneybags Jr. into my own post. I think giving your second post more of a narrative definitely helped with the overall idea you were trying to convey. The picture of you in Seattle is nice, but how is it related to Moneybags Jr.? I understand the level of difficulty in creating something personal yet intelligent enough for other people to observe and interpret. My blog is definitely far from perfect, and there are many revisions that need to be made. Overall I like the idea of your blog and where you are going with it, but Iʻd like to see more of a relationship between your text, pictures, and theme.
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